I still remember the English class that I had last week.（段评：本段开门见山点明了要回忆的核心事件,作为记叙文的开头简洁清晰,符合初中记叙文开篇点题的基础要求。你可以在现有内容上补充一个简单的细节,比如“last week”对应的具体时间(比如last Friday),让场景更有真实感,所用词汇都在初中课标范围内,很容易模仿。修改版：I still remember the special English class that I had last Friday.）

Our the (改：Our) teacher told us that we would share our favourite stories.（段评：本段的核心意思表达得很清楚,但是存在冠词误用的问题:片段“Our the teacher”里物主代词our和定冠词the不能同时修饰名词teacher,二者保留其一即可。修正错误后可以再补充一个简单的细节,比如老师说的活动安排是“in front of the class”,内容更具体。修改版：Our teacher told us that we would stand in front of the class and share our favourite stories.）

At first, I was so nervous that my heart beat fast, because I feared I might make mistakes. When I stood up, I saw my teacher's warm smile. It gave me encourage (改：courage) and I finished sharing.（段评：本段的心理活动和场景描写非常细腻,把紧张的状态写得很真实,值得表扬！这里有一个搭配不当的小错误:片段“gave me encourage”中,encourage是动词,介词me后面需要接名词,应该改为encouragement。另外可以添加过渡词“However”衔接前后紧张和获得勇气的转折关系,让逻辑更顺畅。修改版：At first,I was so nervous that my heart beat fast,because I feared I might make mistakes. However,when I stood up,I saw my teacher's warm smile. It gave me encouragement and I finished my sharing smoothly.）

This class tells me that I should believe in myself as long as I have a try. It touches me deeply.（段评：本段作为结尾准确地点明了这节课带给你的感悟,主题升华得很自然。你可以把两句简单句用并列连词整合,再用定语从句把感悟和这节课关联起来,比如用that引导的限制性定语从句修饰the lesson,符合初中课标语法要求,句式也会更丰富。修改版：This class tells me that I should believe in myself as long as I have a try,and it is a special lesson that touches me deeply.）