世界环境日，倡导同学们坚持“绿色出行＂，请用英语写一篇演讲稿。
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Dear students,
In order to protect our earth and live a healthy life, we should choose some green ways to go out.
Going out in green ways can not only keep us healthy but also avoid air pollution greatly. There are some good green ways for you to choose.
If your home is far away from your school, you can choose a public transportation (改：public transportation) . You can run there certainly (改：too) . You can walk to school if there is a short way to go . It's also a simple way to exercise. The green ways make the climate keeps (改：keep) getting better. So we can enjoy a healthy life easier than before.
I'm sure you understand the importance of green ways. Let's do it now!
综合评价：
1同学，你好！这篇演讲稿紧扣绿色出行的主题，立意非常明确，结构也很清晰：开头点明绿色出行的目的，中间列举了不同的出行方式，结尾发出行动号召，完全符合本次写作的要求，能看出你把课堂上学的not only...but also...句型用得很扎实，很棒。这里有几个小细节可以调整哦：第一，“a public transportation”里transportation是不可数名词，要去掉a，改成public transport就对了；第二，“make the climate keeps getting better”违反了make的用法规则，make后面的宾补要用动词原形，改成“make the climate get better gradually”就符合主谓一致的要求啦。你之后可以试着在文中加一两个我们初中已学的简单连接词，比如在介绍出行方式前加For example，让逻辑更顺；还可以补充一个身边的小细节，比如“骑车上学还能和顺路的同学聊天”，会让你的倡议更有感染力，更容易打动身边的同学哦。
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