In the slience (改：silence) for a long time, I was too nervous to shake. Maybe he had the racial discrimination so he doesn't trust me, maybe he just didn't heared (改：heard) my words clearly. When I finaily (改：finally) decided to open my mouth and say it again, he smiled and said slowly, ' Here you are, you should write your personal name, telephone number and ID number on this paper.' The farmer looked my eyes (改：looked into my eyes) doubtly (改：doubtfully) for a long time and wanted to say something, but Buck stopped him. My heart became warmer and my body stopped shaking.（段评：本段生动描绘了紧张的场景,细节描写真实,情感变化清晰！但存在一些语法和表达问题: 1. 拼写错误:'slience'应改为'silence','finaily'应改为'finally','heared'应改为'heard','doubtly'应改为'doubtfully'。 2. 时态误用:'doesn't (改：didn't) trust'应改为'didn't trust',保持时态一致。 3. 搭配不当:'looked my eyes'应改为'looked into my eyes',这是固定搭配。修改版：In the silence for a long time,I was too nervous to stop shaking. Maybe he had racial discrimination so he didn't trust me,or maybe he just didn't hear my words clearly. When I finally decided to open my mouth and say it again,he smiled and said slowly,'Here you are. You should write your name,telephone number and ID number on this paper.' The farmer looked into my eyes doubtfully for a long time and wanted to say something,but Buck stopped him. My heart became warmer and my body stopped shaking.）
I always review that day, reviewing Buck's trustful look and his warm heart. I was so glad that he wanted to trust me and don't listen to the farmer who looked unfriendly. I told my family this small thing and they were naturally surprised by this thing (改：by it) . This experience was liked (改：was like) a sweet dream for me. And let me felt (改：let me feel) the trust and warm (改：warmth) between the person to person (改：people) , also deeply changed my mind in the life.（段评：本段总结了事件带来的感悟,情感真挚！但存在一些表达问题: 1. 词汇重复:'review'重复使用,修改版使用了'dwell on'和'remember'来丰富表达。 2. 时态误用:'don't (改：didn't) listen'应改为'didn't listen',保持时态一致。 3. 表达不够地道:'was liked'应改为'was like','let me felt'应改为'let me feel','between the person to person'应改为'between people'。修改版：I always dwell on that day,remembering Buck's trusting look and his warm heart. I was so glad that he chose to trust me and didn't listen to the unfriendly farmer. I told my family about this small incident,and they were naturally surprised by it. This experience was like a sweet dream to me. It made me feel the trust and warmth between people,and also deeply changed my outlook on life.）
