上周末,你参加了学校文化艺术节的'Amazing Heritage Sites”的主活动。请你写一篇报稿到学校英文报,内容包括:
1.活动过程;
2.收获和感想。
注意:
1.写作词数应为80个左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
In order to provide the students with a colorful school life, our school held 'Amazing Heritage Sites' activity (改:held the 'Amazing Heritage Sites' activity) last weekend.(段评:开头简洁明了,点明了活动的目的和时间。但缺少冠词,“held 'Amazing Heritage Sites' activity”应改为“held the 'Amazing Heritage Sites' activity”,因为特指学校举办的这个活动。修改版:In order to provide students with a colorful school life,our school held the 'Amazing Heritage Sites' activity last weekend.)
During the activity, we watched films about different heritages, such as Great Wall (改:the Great Wall) and The Forbidden City. Then we learn (改:learned) history about them. This activity not only raises (改:raised) our awareness of heritages protection (改:heritage protection) but also promotes (改:promoted) the spread of Chinese culture.(段评:活动过程描述清晰,收获部分点明了活动意义。但存在两个问题:1. 时态误用,“we learn history”应改为“we learned history”,与前文“watched”保持时态一致;2. 冠词缺失,“Great Wall”前需加定冠词“the”,即“the Great Wall”。修改版:During the activity,we watched films about different heritages,such as the Great Wall and the Forbidden City. Then we learned about their history. This activity not only raised our awareness of heritage protection but also promoted the spread of Chinese culture.)
It turned out to be a truly inspiring event!(段评:结尾简洁有力,总结了活动的积极影响。无需修改。修改版:It turned out to be a truly inspiring event!)




