It seemed like time streamed slowlier (改：more slowly) and slowlier. I embarrassly (改：embarrassedly) stood at the ground with my heart pounding. The famer (改：farmer) 's sight filled me with nervousness. I knew I should say something to explain that my family were 'good for it', but my tongue was tied by my shame proud (改：shame and pride) . 'Who are your parents?' finally, Buck asked. I answered, head down like other black youths I have seen (改：had seen) . Buck nodded in the farmer's unbelievable sight, 'You are good for it.' He smiled at me.（段评：本段通过细腻的心理描写展现了紧张的氛围,情感表达真挚！存在以下问题: 1. 词汇错误:slowlier应改为slower,embarrassly应改为embarrassedly,famer应改为farmer,shame proud应改为shame and pride,have seen应改为had seen(过去完成时) 2. 介词搭配错误:stood at the ground应改为stood on the ground 3. 表达问题:in the farmer's unbelievable sight应改为in the farmer's disbelieving gaze,更符合英语表达习惯修改版：It seemed like time flowed slower and slower. I embarrassedly stood on the ground with my heart pounding. The farmer's gaze filled me with nervousness. I knew I should say something to explain that my family was 'good for it',but my tongue was tied by my shame and pride. 'Who are your parents?' finally (改：Finally) ,Buck asked. I answered,head down like other black youths I had seen. Buck nodded in the farmer's disbelieving gaze,'You are good for it.' He smiled at me.）
They were hard - working, honest and always follow (改：kept) the promise, thus cause (改：earned) Buck trust me who is their kid. A flood of warmth and proud (改：pride) washed over me. I jumped in to (改：into) the old truck, left (改：leaving) the dust behind. When I gave the wire to my parents, their smile was like they already knew the result. This precious experience has taught me that our own virtues can cross the ugly discrimination and into other's heart.（段评：本段通过父母的品质解释了信任的来源,情感真挚！存在以下问题: 1. 主谓不一致:follow应改为followed 2. 非谓语错误:cause应改为causing 3. 词汇错误:proud应改为pride,jumped in to应改为jumped into 4. 表达问题:like they already knew应改为as if they already knew,cross应改为break through修改版：They were hard-working,honest and always followed their promises,thus causing Buck to trust me as their child. A flood of warmth and pride washed over me. I jumped into the old truck,leaving the dust behind. When I gave the wire to my parents,their smile was as if they already knew the result. This precious experience has taught me that our own virtues can break through the ugly discrimination and enter others' hearts.）
Hope love (改：May love) between people will stream like the endless river.（段评：本段作为结尾,表达了对人间大爱的美好愿望！存在以下问题: 1. 词汇错误:stream应改为flow 2. 表达问题:love between people应改为the love between people,更符合英语表达习惯修改版：May the love between people flow like an endless river.）
