As a middle school student. It's important for us to be civilized.（段评：作为记叙文的开头,你直接点明了文明的重要性,简洁明了！但存在两个小问题: 1. 残缺句(碎句):“As a middle school student.” 是不完整的句子,应该和后面的句子合并。 2. 表达可以更生动:“It's important” 稍显平淡,可以换成更有力的表达。修改版：As a middle school student,it's crucial for us to be civilized.）
We should be honest to everyone. polite. (改：polite,) helpful and kind When a person cut (改：cuts) in before you. What do you think of him? He is impolite and rude. So. We should be civilized and kind to every one (改：everyone) .（段评：你通过具体例子说明了不文明行为的影响,观点很清晰！但有几个需要改进的地方: 1. 标点错误:“polite.” 后面应该用逗号,因为它和前面的“honest”是并列关系。 2. 时态误用:“When a person cut in” 应该用一般现在时“cuts”,和后面的时态保持一致。 3. 逻辑连接:可以添加连接词让句子更连贯。修改版：We should be honest,polite,helpful and kind to everyone. When a person cuts in before you,what do you think of him? He is impolite and rude. So we should be civilized and kind to everyone.）
I'm a civilized student. I always follow the table manners for example, I never talk with food in my mouth and talk and laugh loudly. In my daily lifes (改：life) . I often say please and thank you. When I discuss some problems with classmates. I always listen carefully. It's polite to say hello to our teachers. Saying dirty words is rude. So I never do that.（段评：你通过具体事例展示了自己的文明行为,内容很充实！但有几个小错误: 1. 拼写错误:“lifes” 应该是“life”,“every one” 应该是“everyone”。 2. 标点错误:“for example” 前面应该用逗号,后面应该用冒号。 3. 表达重复:“talk with food in my mouth and talk and laugh loudly” 中“talk”重复了,可以简化。修改版：I'm a civilized student. I always follow table manners. For example,I never talk with food in my mouth or laugh loudly. In my daily life,I often say 'please' and 'thank you'. When I discuss problems with classmates,I always listen carefully. It's polite to say hello to our teachers. Saying dirty words is rude,so I never do that.）
Being a civilized student is important. Actions speak louder than words. It's time for us to be polite. Let's take actions right away.（段评：作为结尾,你总结了文明的重要性,呼吁大家行动起来,很有号召力！但可以让表达更流畅: 1. 逻辑连接:“Actions speak louder than words” 可以和前面的句子更好地衔接。 2. 表达可以更自然:“It's time for us to be polite” 可以调整得更贴合主题。修改版：Being a civilized student is important. As the saying goes,actions speak louder than words. It's time for us to be more polite and civilized. Let's take action right away!）
